After having my peers read and comment on my essay and reviewing their comments I was able to make some global and local revisions. The most important revision I made was a global one, more specifically the change was to my thesis. At first it wasn’t really clear where my thesis was and what exactly my stance was on grades, but after revising it I made it very clear that my position is that grades are flawed but necessary. As for local revisions, I change the entire closing sentence for the third paragraph as one of my peers pointed out that it was all over the place and hard to follow.
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